Comments on: Forks and Spoons http://www.kimberleeconwayireton.net/2009/07/forks-and-spoons/ is the author of THE CIRCLE OF SEASONS: MEETING GOD IN THE CHURCH YEAR (InterVarsity). She blogs about the 3R's: reading, writing, and raising her four children. Fri, 10 Feb 2012 01:56:36 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Eleanor Woodfin Craig http://www.kimberleeconwayireton.net/2009/07/forks-and-spoons/comment-page-1/#comment-334 Eleanor Woodfin Craig Tue, 21 Jul 2009 21:23:15 +0000 http://www.kimberleeconwayireton.net/?p=308#comment-334 Kimberlee, there's too much tension in the room for "please", esp two times. I'd remove them both. Also, if you are trying to create friction between Sara and Vicki, Sara should be forceful, not pathetic. Try this: Sara glowered at Vicki. "Just a minute, Vicki! Nancy, Bess, and George have been kidnapped! I have to find out if they are going to be okay." Kimberlee, there’s too much tension in the room for “please”, esp two times. I’d remove them both. Also, if you are trying to create friction between Sara and Vicki, Sara should be forceful, not pathetic. Try this:

Sara glowered at Vicki. “Just a minute, Vicki! Nancy, Bess, and George have been kidnapped! I have to find out if they are going to be okay.”

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